Writing the dreaded blurb

So this was fun.

I can talk about nothing all day (have you noticed?). I can churn out a few hundred words on a story most days. I can edit for hours if you make me. Condensing three years of work into a hundred word blurb? Mission Impossible.

It should be easy. Just don’t overthink it, don’t try to hard to be enticing or mysterious, just write a sort of thesis statement for your book, right? Nothing I wrote ever felt right, and believe me, I wrote a lot. Or don’t believe me. Read on for yourself. Get a few laughs, get a few ideas, get excited about Asylum and go read it. (P.s. Today is update day, yay!!!)

A demon summoner trying to take back his life after centuries of servitude. A demon trying to hide from a sadistic master. A dancer trying to outrun the grief of her past. Asylum is home to many secrets, but built on hope, everyone is trying to find a future they can all live with together.

 

A man with no past he remembers. A demon with a past she can’t forget. The dancers of Asylum, a shapeshifter’s nightclub, are caught in between. Follow Naj, a serpent shapeshifter, as he tries to find his place in the world after decades in a magical sleep. A sleep not long enough to keep the demons he once hunted from finding him. Will his new family still welcome him once they learn the truth? Will they survive it?

 

From here, I felt like I had some good pieces, and just needed to figure out how in the heck to string them together. One was too literal and one was too vague, and neither one quite told the story I wanted to.

 


A man with no past he remembers. A demon with a past she can’t forget.
Asylum is home to many stories and many secrets, welcoming all who seek shelter among its dancers.
Follow Naj, a serpent shapeshifter, as he tries to find his place in the world after decades in a magical sleep. A sleep not long enough to keep the demons he once hunted from finding him. Will his new family still welcome him once they learn the truth? Will they survive it?

I want to get Nica in here somewhere, do you think we can without being too messy?

 

I’ll confess, I started to get discouraged. So I pulled in some friends, one who is a long time fan (*waves* hello dear!) and one who knew absolutely nothing about Asylum outside of what he’d gathered from the blurbs I’d already sent.

 

A demon summoner trying to take back his life after centuries of servitude. A demon trying to hide from a sadistic master. A dancer trying to outrun the grief of her past. Asylum is home to many stories and many secrets.

Follow Naj as he tries to find a home in a world he hardly understands.

Asylum is home to many stories and many secrets, welcoming all who seek shelter among its dancers. Naj, a serpent shapeshifter, tries to find his place in the world after decades in a magical sleep. Will his new family still welcome him once they learn the truth? Will they survive it?

Nica is running from her past. Naj can’t remember his. The two may be closer than they think.

 

Getting others involved was the trick (and walking away and doing some household chores. Nothing like mundane labor to free up a bored mind). May I present, with more ceremony than it deserves, the great golden winner of them all:

 

 

Nica is running from her past. Naj can’t remember his. The two may be closer than they think. Asylum is home to many stories and many secrets, welcoming all who seek shelter among its dancers. After years in a magical sleep, Naj awakes in Asylum’s rafters knowing only two things: he is a serpent shapeshifter, and he is in hiding.

Powerful demon magic swirls about this place, teasing out memories best forgotten. Can Naj protect Nica and his new family from this looming threat—and how much of that threat does he pose himself?

Now I just have to do A LOT of legwork and get this lovely blurb out there. I’ve submitted to Web Fiction Guide, but I’m still looking for other places, if any of you lovely readers have any suggestions.

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